As a group we met together with our teacher to discuss our storyboards, and to receive positive feedback and constructive criticism on what we could do to improve our storyboard and overall storyline. We also discussed some of our ideas for when it comes to editing, as this was incorporated in our story idea.
Group Members
George Miller
Alexandra Helsby
Jessica Stares
Matthew Cumbers
Idea
A group of students are travelling on a train and are scared by a little boy, when the boy disappears they go and investigate.
Strengths Before looking at storyboard
- Prepared – Meeting Deadlines
- Organised After looking at storyboard
- The blackouts and lights flickering
- Really involved the Mise-en-scene (pivotal the Mise-en-scene)
- Clear idea
Areas to improve
- Variations of shots, maybe adding more close ups
- Shots to show they are on a train (Shots of the London paper and train signs to show they are on a train)
- Shot 1-12 = Show some high angles shots of the friends to show power.
- Shot 9 = add close ups and reaction shots of the lights flickering or her holding onto something to show they can’t see anything and are scared.
- Shot 13 = We see the boy stand up before it goes dark and a low angle shot of him walking, just showing his feet.
- Shot 16 = When the train stops show outside the train (train station) and the doors opening to show the train has stopped.
- Shot 17-19 = close up of holding hands or grabbing a purse to show they are scared and want each others protection.
- Shot 23-24 = show a close up of the little boy turning on the music box
- Shot 24 = little boy sitting exactly how he was when the friends first saw him on the train – to show repetition of the boy and a reoccurring event.
- Shot 26 = As we don’t see the dog with the little boy one of the friends say “where’s the dog” in a panicked voice to show they are worried at it not being there.
- Shot 34 = A close up of the boy closing the music box, the show his feet to show he is moving and that he is in control. – The final shot = This shot leads into the actual and rest of the film… We see a headline of a newspaper saying something like “No signal leads to chaos at a train station” then quick shots of single words ( Four friends, Missing, Item, Found) are shown with the last word being MUSIC BOX which is shown as the title (using after effect).
